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A Blog Post “Before” and “After” Editing

By Melissa Uhles and Kim Poteat

Have you wondered what one of your blog posts would look like before and after editing? Most bloggers have to self edit and may be able to use tools like Grammarly to help. However, if you are writing a post you’d like to get paid for and are just starting out, it wouldn’t hurt to have your work edited by another writer or editor friend.

Pro Tip: If you do edit your posts on your own, let them rest. If you write a rough draft on Monday, close the computer when you are done. Come back on Tuesday or Wednesday to re-read and then edit it. You’ll be amazed what errors you will catch with fresh eyes.

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I asked the Pen and Parent Community for a volunteer to send a rough first draft of a post for me to edit.

Kim Poteat of the Happy Mommy Tired Mommy blog stepped up to help me out with this editing post. She has a 2 year old little boy and on her blog she discusses mom topics, self care and children’s activities.

The rough draft is in BLACK and my edited version is in RED. My notes about the changes I made are in GREY.

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Editing the Title

Attachment Parenting Why its good for you and baby

How Attachment Parenting Helps You Bond with Your Baby

OR

7 Amazing Benefits of Attachment Parenting

OR

Is Attachment Parenting Right for You and Your Baby?

I’ve come up with three possible titles. We use the Yoast plug-in on our WordPress site along with Thrive Themes and are able to test multiple titles to see which one gets the most engagement. If you are able to do something similar, I recommend it. 

If not, choose a title with 6-9 words that expresses what the blog post is about and also shows the benefits or value. Using an odd number at the start of the title is something that may help it stand out as well. People love to  click on titles with numbers too.

Another tip with blog titles is to use “power words” that have emotional impact. I like to think of them more like compelling adjectives that encourage clicks and drives traffic. Some words to consider are amazing, incredible, will make, ultimate, strong, helps, simple, fast and so on.

Editing the Intro

Dr william and Martha Spears have been in pediatric medicine for over 30 years. They have raised eight children. I would definitely take advice from someone with that kind of experience.  Dr. Sears talks about the seven Bs of attachment parenting. These seven Bs are baby bonding, breastfeeding,, baby wearing, baby cry language, beware of baby trainers, and balance. Each one of these practices help create a happy healthy child, according to the article on askdrsears website.

What is attachment parenting? Maybe you’ve heard the phrase but don’t know what it’s all about. I’m breaking it down for you today.

Attachment Parenting pioneer Dr. Sears and his wife Martha Sears believe in the importance of what they call the Seven B’s of baby bonding.

These include:

  1. Baby bonding

  2. Breastfeeding

  3. Baby wearing

  4. Baby cry language

  5. Bedding close to baby

  6. Beware of baby trainers

  7. Balance.

Dr. Sears believed these practices help create a happy and healthy child.

Notice that I broke up the paragraph to add emphasis and bolded the heading.  I’ve also underlined the B’s because they are the crux of the blog post. The original list only mentions five of the B’s, I added the other two and put them all in a bulleted list so the reader knows what they are going to read more about.

I’ve also included the link to the Dr. Sears website for proper attribution. Notice how I’ve used the word “believed” instead of stating anything as fact because this is a parenting philosophy and one that may or may not be controversial to certain readers.

Editing Paragraph One

Baby Bonding

In an article on Dr Sears website it explains that right after birth it is beneficial for baby and mom to bond.  Have the drs. Put the baby on your chest and touch your babies skin as much as possible. You and baby feel instant love during skin to skin contact. Even if you can't hold your baby right away there is still time to bond. My son was in an incubator for the first 3 days of his life, I held his hand every chance I got and spoke to him. Just hearing moms voice and even the smallest of contact is beneficial.

Baby Bonding

According to an article on Ask Dr. Sears, the moment after birth is a beneficial time for mother and baby bonding time. Skin to skin contact is important.

Even if you can't hold your baby right away, this is still a time for potential bonding. My son was in an incubator for the first three days of his life. I held his hand every chance I got and spoke to him. I could sense that hearing my voice and the small physical contact was beneficial to my baby.

I broke up this paragraph into to short ones. Kim has done a good job including her personal experience with her own baby here. I’ve simplified sentences and tried to make them a little more clear. It’s also important to make sure the headings are bolded or stand out as headings before launching into the meat of the blog post. Also make a choice to capitalize every word in your heading or just the first word and keep it consistent.

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Editing Paragraph Two

Breastfeeding

Breastfeeding is so good for you and baby. What if you can't actually breastfeed? You can pump, it is not the same but it is still beneficial. If you are comfortable with it you can pump while holding your baby. They have hands free pumps which are great. Benefits for mom when it comes to breastfeeding is weight loss and it cost less than formula.

Breastfeeding

It’s common knowledge now that breastfeeding is healthy for you and your baby. You get a chance to bond and your baby gets nature-made nutrition. 

But what if you can't breastfeed? If you have issues with your supply or latch you could try pumping. If you are comfortable with it you can pump while holding your baby while using a hands-free pump.

In addition to bonding, benefits for mothers who breastfeed include weight loss and saving the money they’d otherwise have to spend on formula.

I broke up these ideas into three short paragraphs. I took out the phrase “not as good but still beneficial” because it may be alienating to certain readers. If you have a “mom” blog there will be some reading who breastfeed and some that don’t. I also added a link to a Pen and Parent article about breastfeeding. Adding links to other articles on your site will keep your reader on your blog longer.

Editing Paragraph Three

Baby wearing

Not only is baby wearing beneficial it is convenient too. It is great way to bond with baby and it has been said that they learn faster by watching you. It is convenient because you can get things done around the house while having baby on you. It can be very soothing as well because they can hear your heart beat.

Baby Wearing

Not only is baby wearing beneficial, it is convenient too. It is great way to bond with your baby and it has been said that babies learn faster by watching you. It makes life easier because you can get things done around the house while having your baby on you. It can be very soothing as well because your little one can hear your heart-beat.

I made a few minor changes. I put “your baby” instead of baby because it personalizes it for the reader. The word convenient was used twice in this paragraph so I rephrased the second sentence. I also used “little one” instead of baby because it is good to use a variety of pronouns to keep the reader’s interest.

Editing Paragraph Four

Baby Cry language

Babies cry for various reasons, that is their only source of communication. It has been said that they cry out method is not an ideal method for babies.  A baby is trying to tell you something is not right even if they want to be held by you please listen. When a baby cries for an excessive amount of time distrust starts to build with their caregiver. Babies brains release adrenalin and cortisol stress hormones which can effect their social and emotional development later in life.

Baby Cry Language

Babies cry for various reasons because it is their only source of communication. According to the attachment parenting philosophy, the cry it out method is not an ideal sleep training method for babies.  

The theory is that a baby is trying to tell you something is not right. It might simply be that they need to be heard by you because they want to be held. When a baby cries for an excessive amount of time distrust may begin to build toward his/her caregiver. Babies brains release adrenaline and cortisol stress hormones which may affect their social and emotional development later in life.

(I would add another paragraph here citing a study that backs up these claims and use links).

I corrected some typos and broke up the paragraph. There are some declarative statements made that should be either backed up by research with links or the language should be altered to say “the theory is” or “it is believed this may cause…”

Editing Paragraph Five

Beware of baby trainers

It is ok to ask for advice. Not all advice given about taking care of a baby should be taken. Every child is different and you know your child better then anyone. Follow your babies cues if they are hungry, wet, or tired.  People will tell you to sleep train your baby or put them on a schedule. Babies have their own schedule even if it is not convenient for you it may be just what your baby needs.

Beware of Baby Trainers

It is okay to ask for advice. That said, not all advice given about taking care of a baby should be taken. Every child is different and you know your child better than anyone. Follow your babies cues if they are hungry, wet, or tired. People may tell you to sleep train your baby or put them on a schedule. Keep in mind, babies have their own schedule even if it is not convenient for you, it may be just what your baby needs.

(I would add something about your personal experience of following your babies cues here).

I fixed a few typos and suggested adding something extra to personalize the piece here.

Editing Paragraph Six

Bedding close to baby

There are mixed opinions on co – sleeping. There are some benefits to co sleeping though. It is not ideal to have a baby sleep right next to you but having a place to sleep right by your bed is beneficial.  It is another bonding technique and can help when the fear of separation anxiety.

Bedding Close to Baby

There are mixed opinions on co-sleeping. That said, there are some benefits to co-sleeping. It may not be ideal to have a baby sleep right next to you but giving the baby a place to sleep right by your bed is beneficial.  It is another bonding technique and can help when separation anxiety strikes your baby.

(Did Dr. Sears say this, a study? I would cite it here. Also, why is it bad to have the baby in bed next to you?).

I rephrased a little for clarity and advised adding a link backing up why this is true.

Editing Paragraph Seven

Balance

Do not forget to take care of you and your spouse. Having a healthy lifestyle outside of your child is beneficial for all parties. Balance is key , it will make everyone a lot happier. Take time for you and your spouse. Happy you makes baby happy as well.

Balance

Do not forget to take care of yourself and nurture your relationship with your spouse or partner. Having a healthy lifestyle outside of your child is beneficial for all parties. Balance is key. It will make everyone a lot happier. If you are content, your baby will be too.

I rephrased a few things and changed the first sentence to read spouse or partner because not everyone with a baby is married. Also, the word happy was used too many times so I used the word “content” instead in the last sentence.

Editing the Conclusion

Attachment parenting is not necessarily a way of parenting but tools to help you through parenting in a happy way. What are your thoughts on attachment parenting?

Attachment parenting provides tools to help create a positive experience for parents and babies.

Are you ready to try the Seven B’s of attachment parenting? We’d love to hear your thoughts in the comments.

This was a nice conclusion but I broke it up into two parts. I also restated and underlined the seven B’s because that is the main idea of this blog post. It’s also important to state clearly to your audience that you’d love to hear their comments.

Since this is a blog within a blog...here’s our question to you:

How do you handle editing your blog posts? We’d love to hear about it in the comments.

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